My random poem

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yeah, I make a lot of poems randomly. I thought I'd share this one with you!

Leaves fall
Like snow on a winter day
Birds calling
Hoping to go south without delay
As seasons change

Mountain tops
Are covered in snow
It continues to drop
Everyone will know
When the seasons change

Green comes back
Things sprout
Plants attack
There is no doubt
The seasons change

Heat surrounds us
The sun beats down
Taking all the energy we possess
We feel it all around
As seasons change

Criticism please! =]

[Lia]

*cackles* I'm listening to Where The Birds Always Sing... Birds calling...

It's pretty. VERY pertyful. I like the 1st and 3rd verse best.

Get rid of the random " mark at the end! That's my criticism:) Hmm... the only thing I don't like is the bit about people in the 2nd vers stanza but that's 'cause I don't like people very much in general. Oh, and you spelled 'continues' wrong.

Plant attack:D

I like:)

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Okay, I'll change it to everyone will...

and the reason the " is at the end is because normally I do quotations around it but this time I decided not to at the beginning and forgot at the end xP *fail* and I'll fix my typo =] Thanks, Lia!

[~Z~]

Hm... I think it would sound better if you either made it "leaves falling" or "birds call," so it stays rhyming... Other than that, brilliant. ^^